A Scouse Apology

17 Jun

Soz liccchhhh.

I know I promised you details of the bus ride that never happened but I am too tired to finish it. I’ve written novels that are shorter. I haven’t really, but I’m so tired I have no idea what I’m saying.

I’m going to add insult to injury by giving you a poem about a dead rat. I nearly fell over it the other morning when walking for the bus. It looked as if it had just fallen asleep, apart from the fact that it was stiff enough to pick up and bash some spitting boys with.

I happened to be working on the prompt from Big Tent so it gave me my subject matter. The prompt was a Wordle which I can’t reproduce so you’ll have to take my wordle for it.

Tsetse Rat

Poor rat and your pedestrian end:
was it death by cat?
I hope it was old age; you fell asleep.
Dark comfort in your long rest.

Dangerous praise to resent your passing,
forlorn corpse; scorned by
heels and prams and bicycle wheels.

Sleep peaceful, rat, on your dull part
of the dirty path; curled like an idle moon.


35 Responses to “A Scouse Apology”

  1. musings June 18, 2010 at 02:46 #

    That’s quite a powerful poem. The imagery and feelings behind it really grab you. Hmmm… and now I’m curious about that bus ride that didn’t happen.

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  2. mypoeticlicense June 18, 2010 at 04:55 #

    I love that you took the time to, not just contemplate the dead rat, but write well a poem about it too.

    “scorned by
    heels and prams and bicycle wheels”

    and that last stanza – excellent!

    – Dina

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    • tillybud June 19, 2010 at 09:15 #

      Thanks Dina. TBH, I just couldn’t get it out of my mind; it lay in the middle of the pavement, despised by everyone who saw it.

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  3. Stan Ski June 18, 2010 at 07:52 #

    You managed to create some great images from an unlikely source.

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    • tillybud June 19, 2010 at 09:15 #

      Thanks Stan

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  4. vivinfrance June 18, 2010 at 08:59 #

    Tilly, your poetic gifts take a surprising turn sometimes. This is a beautiful poem about an ugly subject. Bravo.
    ViV

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  5. Mary June 18, 2010 at 11:59 #

    You had me empathizing with the rat! I liked ‘curled like an idle moon.’

    http://inthecornerofmyeye.blogspot.com/2010/06/looking-for-love.html

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    • tillybud June 19, 2010 at 09:16 #

      Then I did my job properly 🙂 Thanks for your visit.

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  6. Rachel Barenblat June 18, 2010 at 13:56 #

    Oh, wow; I really like what you did with the wordle prompt! This is short and sharp and quite wonderful.

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    • tillybud June 19, 2010 at 09:17 #

      What a lovely comment. Thank you 🙂

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  7. brenda w June 18, 2010 at 15:15 #

    Nice that you garner sympathy for the poor thing. Most people would just as soon torch it, throw it in the gutter, sing praises to the heavens for the death of yet one more.

    Your take is fresh and surprising. You bring honor to the rat. 🙂 This is a well crafted piece. Bravo!

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    • tillybud June 19, 2010 at 09:17 #

      Thank you Brenda.

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  8. pamela June 18, 2010 at 16:31 #

    Tillybud
    I am with Stan on that one!
    I HATE rodents of any kind!
    Nice work
    Pamela

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    • tillybud June 19, 2010 at 09:18 #

      Thanks Pamela 🙂

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  9. b_y June 18, 2010 at 18:16 #

    curled like an idle moon !zing!

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    • tillybud June 19, 2010 at 09:18 #

      I think you have just written my favourite comment of all time 🙂

      I tried to leave a comment on your blog but couldn’t.

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  10. Carolee June 18, 2010 at 19:31 #

    what a terrific angle/story you got from the words! it hooked me right away with “poor rat …”

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    • tillybud June 19, 2010 at 09:19 #

      Thanks Carolee 🙂

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  11. ravenswingpoetry June 18, 2010 at 21:10 #

    I was emphasizing with the rat too. Poor thing.

    I love your very last image: “curled like an idle moon”.

    Nicely done. I’ll have to come back for more.

    -Nicole

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    • tillybud June 19, 2010 at 09:20 #

      Thanks! 🙂

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  12. Deb June 19, 2010 at 00:50 #

    It was inventive & entertaining. The last line gorgeous.

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    • tillybud June 19, 2010 at 09:20 #

      Thanks Deb 🙂

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  13. nan June 19, 2010 at 16:09 #

    Great last stanza. Something so disgusting compared to an idle moon. Wow and ick.

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    • nan June 19, 2010 at 16:11 #

      and yes, unbelievably to me, I had sympathy for the dead rat . . . that took a work of art.

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      • tillybud June 20, 2010 at 06:18 #

        Thanks Nan. I have to thank that poor rat because it gave me the best response of all the poems I have posted.

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  14. Just Someone June 21, 2010 at 01:53 #

    Poor rat indeed; I feel bad for him… pedestrian end was a cool phrase – though it portrays something somber

    Nice on

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    • tillybud June 21, 2010 at 16:38 #

      Thank you 🙂

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  15. Tumblewords June 21, 2010 at 03:41 #

    Sleep peaceful, rat, on your dull part
    of the dirty path; curled like an idle moon.
    Superb wording – love these lines.

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    • tillybud June 21, 2010 at 16:38 #

      Thanks 🙂

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  16. angie June 21, 2010 at 05:22 #

    you are the queen of poetry, finding a poem in a dead rat!
    I love that last line “curled like an idle moon.”

    wonderful poem.

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    • tillybud June 21, 2010 at 16:39 #

      And you are the queen of compliment-giving! What a lovely thing to say. Thank you 🙂

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  17. kateshrewsday February 16, 2011 at 19:13 #

    Oh, I really love this, Tilly. Sums your little dead find up. Thanks 🙂

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    • Tilly Bud February 16, 2011 at 21:10 #

      Glad you enjoyed it. I felt so sorry for that poor rat.

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  18. colonialist February 19, 2011 at 09:12 #

    Such a sad image. In my imagination, shortly after you passed on, a typical scruffy little boy chanced by, changed into an angel the way scruffy little boys can, put it in a box, and conducted a funeral service and burial for it.

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    • Tilly Bud February 19, 2011 at 12:42 #

      Oh, I love what you did with my poor, dead rat. That is definitely what happened.

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