Soz liccchhhh.
I know I promised you details of the bus ride that never happened but I am too tired to finish it. I’ve written novels that are shorter. I haven’t really, but I’m so tired I have no idea what I’m saying.
I’m going to add insult to injury by giving you a poem about a dead rat. I nearly fell over it the other morning when walking for the bus. It looked as if it had just fallen asleep, apart from the fact that it was stiff enough to pick up and bash some spitting boys with.
I happened to be working on the prompt from Big Tent so it gave me my subject matter. The prompt was a Wordle which I can’t reproduce so you’ll have to take my wordle for it.
Tsetse Rat
Poor rat and your pedestrian end:
was it death by cat?
I hope it was old age; you fell asleep.
Dark comfort in your long rest.
Dangerous praise to resent your passing,
forlorn corpse; scorned by
heels and prams and bicycle wheels.
Sleep peaceful, rat, on your dull part
of the dirty path; curled like an idle moon.
That’s quite a powerful poem. The imagery and feelings behind it really grab you. Hmmm… and now I’m curious about that bus ride that didn’t happen.
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I love that you took the time to, not just contemplate the dead rat, but write well a poem about it too.
“scorned by
heels and prams and bicycle wheels”
and that last stanza – excellent!
– Dina
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Thanks Dina. TBH, I just couldn’t get it out of my mind; it lay in the middle of the pavement, despised by everyone who saw it.
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You managed to create some great images from an unlikely source.
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Thanks Stan
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Tilly, your poetic gifts take a surprising turn sometimes. This is a beautiful poem about an ugly subject. Bravo.
ViV
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You had me empathizing with the rat! I liked ‘curled like an idle moon.’
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Then I did my job properly š Thanks for your visit.
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Oh, wow; I really like what you did with the wordle prompt! This is short and sharp and quite wonderful.
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What a lovely comment. Thank you š
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Nice that you garner sympathy for the poor thing. Most people would just as soon torch it, throw it in the gutter, sing praises to the heavens for the death of yet one more.
Your take is fresh and surprising. You bring honor to the rat. š This is a well crafted piece. Bravo!
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Thank you Brenda.
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Tillybud
I am with Stan on that one!
I HATE rodents of any kind!
Nice work
Pamela
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Thanks Pamela š
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curled like an idle moon !zing!
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I think you have just written my favourite comment of all time š
I tried to leave a comment on your blog but couldn’t.
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what a terrific angle/story you got from the words! it hooked me right away with “poor rat …”
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Thanks Carolee š
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I was emphasizing with the rat too. Poor thing.
I love your very last image: “curled like an idle moon”.
Nicely done. I’ll have to come back for more.
-Nicole
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Thanks! š
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It was inventive & entertaining. The last line gorgeous.
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Thanks Deb š
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Great last stanza. Something so disgusting compared to an idle moon. Wow and ick.
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and yes, unbelievably to me, I had sympathy for the dead rat . . . that took a work of art.
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Thanks Nan. I have to thank that poor rat because it gave me the best response of all the poems I have posted.
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Poor rat indeed; I feel bad for him… pedestrian end was a cool phrase – though it portrays something somber
Nice on
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Thank you š
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Sleep peaceful, rat, on your dull part
of the dirty path; curled like an idle moon.
Superb wording – love these lines.
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Thanks š
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you are the queen of poetry, finding a poem in a dead rat!
I love that last line “curled like an idle moon.”
wonderful poem.
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And you are the queen of compliment-giving! What a lovely thing to say. Thank you š
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Oh, I really love this, Tilly. Sums your little dead find up. Thanks š
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Glad you enjoyed it. I felt so sorry for that poor rat.
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Such a sad image. In my imagination, shortly after you passed on, a typical scruffy little boy chanced by, changed into an angel the way scruffy little boys can, put it in a box, and conducted a funeral service and burial for it.
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Oh, I love what you did with my poor, dead rat. That is definitely what happened.
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